The science is right at Florida 5.L.14.1's level and nothing a doctor would strike; the four lessons each teach one fact in the register's order; the tone of L04 is plain and matter-of-fact. One Must-fix: the L01 video spoke only the dark-urine case while the article taught dark and pale and two quiz items key on pale — the script now carries both in 147 words. Eleven Worth-fixing findings, all applied: three long articles cut toward 300 (328 / 306 / 288); a false feedback line ("nothing but the food tube and the air tube runs through the throat"); a distractor no child picks ("blood and bones"); "by its own way" twice; "far too small to see" for a human egg; the typed "kidneys" item not last in its quiz; PP-16 asking "which organ" over a set holding "out of the body"; PP-27 asking the reason for dark urine without saying she drank little; PP-49 comparing with nothing; a wrong pronoun in a why; two rule cards not word for word; "coloured" in accessible text. Six Simplification-leave rows (the "empty" bladder drawn in the organ's yellow; the man's outline with the organs inside the trunk; the fixed set's filler fourth option; PP-40 leaning on Topic 30's "organ"; practice items on the same move as quiz items with fresh scenes; q5's why printing the path q6 orders). Every render opened and every route read in both colour schemes (the page forces one). Key balance A 10 · B 13 · C 12 · D 9; attached B B A B A B C; no four keys alternate; the three order items stored the stems' way; eight typed items closed and spellable. Gates after the fixes: topic checker 0 FAIL with S46 A = B = 0; terms no hits; articles 0 FAIL; key tells 0 of 101; svg ids PASS; S118 0 FAIL (the S26 tool-scope collision stands as the author recorded it); batch rebuilt, check_brief.py clean, not sent.

50 items in content/G5T34_pp100_bank.py: 44 four-option MCQs, 3 typed words (kidneys, urine, bladder), 2 reorder items, 1 two-of-four select. Per atom: LIF5-065 13 · LIF5-066 12 · LIF5-067 15 · LIF5-068 10. Easy 25, medium 17, hard 8, sorted easy to hard and rising to the capstone (the reproductive-organs atom has no honest hard form and carries none). Fourteen question types, one exemplar each on the type sheet: which organs do this job; the job of a named organ; what the kidneys take out, where an organ sits, which sentence is true about its shape; the coloured organ on the drawn body; the urine's colour after little or a lot to drink; the bladder's state; the next stop; the correct reason; the rule on a fresh case; the path as a list; the typed terms; the path as an order; the two organs the urine passes through; two ideas chained. Every scene is fresh against the lessons, the quizzes and the practice.

Skill: course-build → write-lesson (L01, L02 and L04 told facts at name-the-job level, the body outline placing each organ; L03 a routine, the path waste takes — worked once, checked scaffolded → bare) → write-example-sequence (two fact-form runs), design-check-sequence, sentence-atomise, write-explanation, write-mcqs (quizzes, attached questions, the recall bank, practice, the PP100 bank and its type sheet); write-intro (the topic intro, narrative type); write-video-script (four lesson scripts, the elementary micro-lesson anatomy); write-summary (the summary); review-figures (author self-check on 26 renders and six built pages; the non-author pass is owed) @ cca3af6

Grade 5 Topic 34 — Kidneys, bladder and the reproductive organs — build record (v1, 8 October 2026)

What this is, in plain words

Four short lessons, the last of the five organ topics and the last topic of the course. Iris drinks little on a hot trail and that evening her pee is dark yellow — where does the yellow liquid come from? (L01: two bean-shaped organs at the back of the belly, the kidneys, take waste and extra water out of the blood all day; the waste and extra water leave as urine; little to drink means little extra water and dark urine, a lot means pale.) Jasmine needs the toilet on a long car ride but can wait for the rest stop — where is the urine waiting? (L02: in the bladder, a stretchy bag low in the belly that stores urine until you go; small after the toilet, it stretches as it fills.) Kofi drinks a glass of water at breakfast and needs the toilet by mid-morning — what path did the water take? (L03, the capstone routine: into the blood, through the kidneys as part of the urine, down two tubes into the bladder, out at the toilet; worked on the numbered body drawing and the path card.) Miss Hartley's class looks at the organs on the board; every one keeps the body alive, but one group has a different job (L04: the reproductive organs make the cells a baby grows from, so they let adults have babies; a man's and a woman's are different; they sit low down — the name and the one-line job, nothing further).

Counts. 4 lessons · 4 scripts (149, 150, 149, 147 spoken words) + intro (111 words, 2 question marks) + summary (141 words) · 4 attached questions + the intro's poll + 3 summary questions · 34 quiz items (10 + 9 + 9 + 6; 2 typed, 1 order) · 5 recall-bank items · 17 practice items (12 MCQ, 3 typed, 1 written; three retrievals first; "reproductive organs" recognised by MCQ only) · PP100 bank 50 items (44 four-option MCQs, 3 typed, 2 reorder, 1 multi-select; LIF5-065 13, LIF5-066 12, LIF5-067 15, LIF5-068 10; easy 25, medium 17, hard 8; MCQ keys A 10 · B 13 · C 12 · D 9) · 26 figures (21 SVG by code, 5 cartoon placeholders, no photo) · checker 0 FAIL, 28 WARN (every WARN answered below), S46 A = 0, B = 0, C = 0, D = 0 · check_g5_articles.py 0 FAIL (articles 345 / 328 / 330 / 205 words — the three WARNs answered below) · check_key_tells.py KEY TELLS: 0 of 101 MCQs flagged · check_svg_ids.py PASS (0 ids written) · check_lessons.py S118 0 FAIL (one S26 FAIL, a tool-scope collision, answered below) · names run all from the topic's row · page builds (/tmp/g5t34_test.html: 4 lessons, 17 practice, 50 pp100, 26 figures) and the four article routes, the L01 quiz route, the PP100 route and the summary route screenshotted and read · blind bundle cut (blind/2026-10-08: 95 MCQ, 8 typed, 1 written, 3 order, 1 multi; 108 held) · video batch built (6 videos), check_brief.py clean except the SUMMARY's standing protected-words note, grep -ci strand 0 · NOT sent.

Structural decisions (in place of a blueprint)

One line each, with the reason:

• Four lessons, one per atom, in register order — the architecture row names four atoms; each payoff is one clause; the capstone (the path) is L03 and the reproductive organs close, as the row orders them.
• The headache is the register's own example in L01 (darker urine after a day without much to drink) and the register's trace example in L03 (the water you drank at breakfast); L02's is the full feeling before a toilet break, the register's example. No quoted student anywhere: the narrator asks over the scene (James, 7 Oct).
• "Pee" is said once, beside "urine", in L01 (the headache says "her pee is dark yellow"; the coining says "called urine. Pee is another word for it.") — the plain word a ten-year-old owns, then the term, used from then on in every lesson, item and the summary. The bank never says pee; the typed urine items accept "pee" and "wee" because the lesson licensed them.
• Waste in plain words — "waste" and "extra water"; no urea, no nephron, no "filter" as a sieve (James's scope: names and jobs at a ten-year-old's level). "Two tubes" and "leaves the body", never ureter or urethra. "Urinary system" is never said (the benchmark does not use it).
• The body outline is Topic 30's, by its coordinates — one depiction per thing across the organ topics; Topics 30–33 are being written in parallel, so the outline is copied from Topic 30's _body (head, neck, trunk) rather than imported from a module still changing under another author, and the choice is recorded here. The food organs, heart and lungs are not drawn in this topic: the kidneys sit at the back and would be hidden; each caption that needs it says "the other organs are not drawn".
• One drawing per organ, reused everywhere: the kidneys as two beans under faint rib arcs; the two tubes; the bladder as a small bag; the way out as a short tube; the blood as one red line with a branch into each kidney, drawn only where the lesson follows the blood (L01's teaching figure, L03's path). The headache figure is the teaching figure with the colour layer off.
• The reproductive organs are placed, not drawn — two adult outlines (MAN, WOMAN) with one pale purple shape low in each trunk and nothing inside it. Florida's benchmark asks the name and the one-line job; the figure shows where and that there are two different bodies, and no more. The same drawing is identical for the two outlines on purpose; the caption carries the difference ("a man's and a woman's are different").
• L04 dives straight in — the concept-introduction type's rule: if there is no honest headache, do not invent one. The lesson's opening is the board drawing the class already knows and the plain fact that one organ group has a different job.
• "Organ" is recalled, never re-coined — Topic 30 coins it; here each organ lesson says once "a part inside the body with its own job" and the recall bank asks it before L01.
• The recall bank (James, 8 Oct) carries five items: "organ" and "the heart pumps blood all round the body" before L01; "the intestines take the useful parts of food into the blood" and the heart again before L03; "each part inside the body has its own job" before L04. No recall before L02 (every idea it leans on is L01's, the lesson immediately before).
• No claim item and no stated belief anywhere — the LIF5 register's SD-6 list names one belief (food and air go down one tube), which is Topic 31's and touches none of these atoms; the catalogue is a physics catalogue. A bank with no claim items is a fine bank.
• Why "extra water" is explained — the register's dark-urine example needs it: the kidneys take out waste AND the water the body does not need; little to drink → little extra water → dark urine. It is said as what-then-why (the colour first, the reason after) and is tested as apply and reason items, never as a mechanism.

Questions for James

None. Every call here is a call on names, synonyms, example order, figure form or scope that the brief and the register already fix; none would change what a student learns if answered the other way.

Design-check-sequence records

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Part: L01 (LIF5-065)

Type: (a) one-step fact — which organs, what they take out, where they sit, dark or pale; the answer is one thing.

Plan: which organs clean the blood (3 opt, 1) → the two things taken out (3 opt, 2) → where they sit (3 opt, 1) → dark after little to drink (2 opt, 0) → pale after a lot (2 opt, 1) → the correct reason for pale (3 opt, 2) → the blood leaving a kidney (3 opt, 2) → TERM kidneys recognised (4 opt, 1) → TERM kidneys typed → TERM urine recognised (3 opt, 0). Three-option string 1 2 1 2 2 0; two-option 0 1.

Belongs in practice/test instead: the fixed four-option sets; the drawn body; the typed urine; the "nothing took the waste out" reason (PP types 1–5, 8, 11).

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Part: L02 (LIF5-066)

Type: (a) one-step fact — where the urine goes, what the bladder does, empty or full.

Plan: where urine goes next (3 opt, 0) → the bladder's job (3 opt, 2) → just after the toilet (2 opt, 0) → three hours and a bottle later (2 opt, 1) → the full feeling (3 opt, 1) → where it sits (3 opt, 2) → while she waits (3 opt, 0) → TERM bladder recognised (4 opt, 0) → TERM bladder typed. Three-option string 0 2 1 2 0; two-option 0 1.

Belongs in practice/test instead: the four-option state set; the drawn body; the two-tubes item; what happens when she goes (PP types 1–4, 6–9, 11).

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Part: L03 (LIF5-067)

Type: (b) multi-step routine — four stops in order; the student can be right at stop 1 and wrong at stop 3.

Plan: worked example on the page (Kofi's water); SCAFFOLD on a second case (a glass of milk): which organs take the waste out (3 opt, 0) → what it leaves the kidneys as (3 opt, 1) → where next (3 opt, 2) → when it leaves the body (3 opt, 0); BARE on fresh cases: the path as a list (3 opt, 1) → the path as an ORDER item (4 steps, first to last) → the first stop out of the blood (2 opt, 0) → the organs the urine came from (3 opt, 2) → TRANSFER: nothing to drink all afternoon — does the bladder still fill? (yes). Three-option string 0 1 2 0 1 2; two-option 0 0.

Belongs in practice/test instead: the four path lists; the two reorder items; the multi-select; the two chained items (PP types 7, 10, 12–14).

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Part: L04 (LIF5-068)

Type: (a) one-step fact at the benchmark's level — the job, who, same or different, where.

Plan: the job (3 opt, 0) → which people (2 opt, 0) → the same or different (2 opt, 1) → which organs made the cells a person grew from (3 opt, 2) → where they sit (3 opt, 1) → TERM reproductive organs recognised (4 opt, 1; RECALL_BY_MCQ, never typed). Six items: a one-line fact gets as many honest items as exist, never ten (James, 29 Sep). Three-option string 0 2 1; two-option 0 1.

Belongs in practice/test instead: the organ-and-job pair; the reason they are organs; what a woman's organs make (PP types 1–3, 8–9).

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The key strings

• Attached questions in video order (L01, L02, L03, L04, summary 1–3): B B A B A B C — B 4 of 7 (57 %).
• Lesson quizzes, three-option items: L01 1 2 1 2 2 0; L02 0 2 1 2 0; L03 0 1 2 0 1 2; L04 0 2 1. Two-option: L01 0 1; L02 0 1; L03 0 0; L04 0 1. Four-option: L01 1; L02 0; L04 1. No four keys in a row alternate across the module (check_lessons.py S116 silent after two re-keys: L01-q6 → 2, L03-q4 → 0, L03-q5 → 1, L03-q8 → 2).
• Practice: three-option 0 1 0 0 2, two-option 1 1 1, four-option 1 1 2 1 3.
• PP100 MCQ keys: A 10 · B 13 · C 12 · D 9 (44 MCQs); the three typed items, the two reorder items and the multi-select carry no letter.
• Claims: none in the topic (no documented belief). Order convention: every order item is stored FIRST TO LAST, the direction its stem asks ("from where it goes first to where it goes last"); no item asks the reverse. Lettered drawings: none (the drawn body has no letters; the stems name the coloured part).
• Typed keys (S30 clean, 8 items): kidneys (kidney / the kidneys / kidnies / kidnys / kidneyes / kidnees), urine (urin / yurine / urrine / pee / wee), bladder (blader / bladdar / bladda / blatter) — each inside its lexicon sentence; "reproductive organs" never typed.

The example sequences, written out

L01 (fact form; the one feature that changes is how much Iris drank): little to drink → little extra water → the kidneys take out little water with the waste → dark yellow urine · a lot to drink → a lot of extra water → the kidneys take out a lot of water with the waste → pale yellow urine. The kidneys clean the blood in both; the table lines the two cases up. Rule: The kidneys clean the blood. They take waste and extra water out of the blood, and the waste and extra water leave as urine.

L02 (fact form; the one feature that changes is the time since the toilet): just after a toilet stop → the bladder is small and empty, and urine trickles in → it stores every drop · an hour later → it has stretched as it filled → fairly full, and Jasmine feels the need → it still stores the urine. Rule: The bladder is a stretchy bag that stores urine until you go to the toilet. It stretches as it fills and empties when you go.

L03 (routine, no sequence): 1 the blood (the intestines took the water in; the heart pumps it round; waste joins it) → 2 the kidneys (waste and extra water out, as urine) → 3 the bladder (down two tubes; stored) → 4 out of the body (at the toilet). Rule: Waste goes from the blood into the kidneys, and the kidneys turn the waste and extra water into urine. The urine flows down two tubes into the bladder, and it leaves the body when you go to the toilet.

L04 (told fact, no sequence): one tiny cell → the cells a baby grows from are made by the reproductive organs → a man's make one kind, a woman's another → so they are different → low down in the body. Rule: The reproductive organs make the cells that a baby grows from, so they let adults have babies. A man's reproductive organs and a woman's are different.

check_lessons.py S118: 0 FAIL on both sequences blocks (one feature changes per step; form fact).

The rules applied (the brief's rulings 1–13 and the vault notes)

Documented misconceptions used, and the beliefs deliberately NOT stated

• Used: none. The LIF5 register's SD-6 list carries one belief — "Food, air travel down the same tube to the same place inside you" — which belongs to Topic 31 (the lungs) and touches none of LIF5-065 to 068. The physics catalogue has no row on these atoms. No cross note names a belief.
• Not stated (plausible but undocumented, so never written as a claim or a stated-then-denied line): that urine is "dirty water" or comes straight from what you drink; that the bladder makes urine; that holding urine is harmful; that the kidneys are one organ. Each is met only as a distractor whose feedback states the fact (L02-q1 "back into her blood"; L03-q2 "clean blood"; PP-30 "it makes more urine"), never as a sentence the lesson asserts.

Checker results, every WARN answered

python3 build_tools_check_topic.py grade5/topic34_build/content/G5T34.py → 0 FAIL, 28 WARN; S46-COUNTS G5T34 B=0 C=0 D=0 (A: no forward use); S38 fragments 0; S30 typed 8, fail 0, warn 0; S37 strand 0; S29 / S39 / S40 / S41 / S42 / S43 / S44 / S45 all 0.

python3 grade5/check_g5_articles.py … → 0 FAIL: scripts 149 / 150 / 149 / 147 (≤ 150); intro 111 (≤ 120); summary 141 (≤ 175), opener ok. Three WARNs (articles 345 / 328 / 330 > 300): kept — the brief's cap is the script's; Grade 3's approved articles run to a median of 308; each article carries a two-case run or a four-stop routine and a closing return, and a subtitle or figure every ≤ 8 idea lines (S16 silent). L01 was trimmed from 362 (the fist comparison, the merged waste lines, the clean-blood line cut); L03 from 344.

python3 build_tools_check_terms.py … → 1 topics, 4 lessons, 4 declared terms — hits: {} (no A, B, C or D hit).

python3 ~/…/write-mcqs/check_key_tells.py … → KEY TELLS: 0 of 101 MCQs flagged (a: 0, b: 0, c: 0) after six fixes (L01-q3, L02-q2, L04-q1 and PR-1 distractors lengthened to the key's shape; PP-28 distractors lengthened; PP-50's key lost its ", and").

python3 ~/…/review-figures/check_svg_ids.py …/figures.py → figures read: 26 ids found: 0 ids shared: 0 RESULT: PASS.

python3 ~/…/course-build/check/check_lessons.py --adapter tools/check_adapter_g5.json … → S118 0 FAIL (silent); S116 silent after the re-keys; one S26 FAIL kept and recorded as a tool-scope collision: the vault tool reads the whole topic module as one page and asks that the typed term item be the last live check of the module, so L02's typed "bladder" (last in L02's quiz) fails because L03 and L04 follow. James's rule is per quiz ("term-recall items sit LAST in their quiz and in the practice set"), and every typed item here is last in its own quiz and the practice's term items are last. Not a content change; the collision is for the coordinator (the same hit will stand on every multi-lesson Grade 3–5 module with a typed item before its last lesson).

python3 build_tools_names.py Iris Jasmine Kofi Hartley → Iris INFO (also topic16), Jasmine INFO (also topic24), Kofi free, Hartley free — cross-topic recurrence is information only (James, 6 Oct); one child per name within this topic.

python3 build_tools_build_topic_site.py … /tmp/g5t34_test.html → 4 lessons, 17 practice, 50 pp100, 26 figures. Screenshotted at 800 px and read: #/lesson/L01/script, #/lesson/L01/article, #/lesson/L03/script, #/lesson/L04/article, #/lesson/L01/quiz, #/pp100, #/summary.

Bank freshness, re-performed

Scene nouns of the lessons, quizzes, attached, summary and practice items: hiking, trail, bottle, car ride, back seat, juice, rest stop, breakfast, glass of water, board, drawing, playground, recess, Iris, Jasmine, Kofi, Hartley, beach, basketball, lemonade, party, movie, bus, swim meet, glass of milk, bottle of water at lunch, hot chocolate, baseball, zoo, plane, apple cider, stairs, sandwich, soup, dinner. Grep against the 50 bank items after the re-scening of PP-46 (fruit punch), PP-48 (a can of soda) and PP-50 (two big cups of water): 0 scene hits; the only word matches are "drawing" in PP-05 and PP-12, where the stem names the item's own figure ("this drawing of the inside of the body"), not Miss Hartley's board scene. Practice against the lesson and quiz scenes: 0 hits after PR-8 (apple cider), PR-9 (a big cup of water) and PR-11's distractor (spit, not juice). Seven S28 word-for-word repeats (PP-4, 11, 17, 20, 23, 24, 35 against quiz or practice items) were re-scened on 8 Oct; S28 is now silent.

Blind-text grep

The two item drawings' blind lines, grepped for kidney / bladder / urine / reproductive / clean / store / waste: 0 hits. Each describes the drawing as data ("two bean shapes, one each side of the middle of the body, just under two faint rib lines, with a thin gray tube running down from each"; "a small bag low in the middle of the belly, with a thin gray tube coming down into it from each side and a short gray tube leaving its bottom"). The bundle's [Drawing: …] lines grepped the same way: 0 hits.

Figures (author self-check on the renders; the non-author review-figures pass is owed)

26 figures rendered to /tmp/g5t34_figs/ and ten opened as PNG at 600 px (body_kidneys_blood, body_bladder, body_path, kidney_card, bladder_pair, path_card, two_bodies, rule_l03, drink_table, jobs_table_3), then every article route read on the built page. Found and fixed: the kidney path's format string (a malformed bean) → rewritten as five quadratic curves with the notch facing the middle; the two adult outlines' MAN / WOMAN chips overlapped the heads → the outlines lowered 22 units and the frame made 400 tall. Read true: the kidneys sit under the rib arcs one each side; the tubes meet the bladder; the blood line branches into each kidney; the numbered chips sit beside the parts they name; the path card's arrows point right; the jobs table's cells fit their columns (the drawer's guard). Colour words in captions match the renders (dark red kidneys, pale yellow bladder, yellow-brown tubes, red blood line, pale purple shape).

Names run

Topic 34's row of grade5/NAMES_POOL.md: Miss Hartley; Iris, Jasmine, Kofi. Iris carries the intro and L01, Jasmine L02, Kofi L03, Miss Hartley L04. No other name appears in any lesson, item or brief; bank and practice items say "a girl" / "a boy". Cross-topic recurrence (Iris in topic16, Jasmine in topic24) is information only.

The recall bank

Sentence-atomise self-check (one table per paragraph, collapsed to the rows that changed)

The mechanical twins (S1 one sentence ≤ 22 words; S2 every line a verb; S38 every sentence a subject and a verb; S36 word list) run clean or are answered above.

Judgement calls and rule collisions

1. "Pee" once beside "urine". The brief allowed it on the author's judgement. Said twice in L01 — the headache ("her pee is dark yellow", before any term exists) and the coining ("called urine. Pee is another word for it.") — and nowhere else in the lessons; the typed urine items accept "pee" and "wee"; the bank never says it. Reason: a ten-year-old owns "pee" and not "urine"; explain-then-label wants the plain word first.
2. The body outline copied from Topic 30 by coordinates, not imported. The rule says a thing an earlier topic draws is imported; Topics 30–33 are parallel builds whose modules are changing under other authors this afternoon, and Topic 30's _body draws the four food organs in every call (they would hide the kidneys). Copying the outline's three primitives keeps one depiction across the organ topics without a live dependency on an unfinished sibling. If the coordinator prefers an import once Topic 30 is committed, the swap is three lines.
3. The organs the kidneys sit behind are not drawn. In a front view the kidneys lie behind the intestines and the liver; drawing them all would hide the lesson's organ or put it in front where it is not. Each caption that needs it says "the other organs are not drawn". A true-to-position figure would need a back view, a second depiction of the body — refused by one-depiction-per-thing.
4. The reproductive organs are placed with one shape in two plain adult outlines. Within James's scope (the name and the one-line job, no mechanism, no sex education content), the figure shows where and that a man's and a woman's differ; the two drawings are deliberately identical and the caption carries the difference. Anything more is beyond the benchmark.
5. "Extra water" taught alongside waste. The atom's behaviour says "filter waste … turning it into urine"; its example (darker urine after little to drink) cannot be explained without the water the body does not need. Taught as what-then-why in two sentences, tested as apply and reason items. Not a mechanism (no concentration, no balance).
6. L03 opens the trace at the glass, not at the blood. The register's behaviour starts at the blood; its example follows "the water you drank at breakfast". The lesson gives the water two set-up lines (the intestines take it into the blood; the heart pumps it round — both recalled by the recall bank) and then runs the register's four stops from the blood; the rule line and the path card start at the blood.
7. Collision: check_lessons.py S26 (typed item last) reads the module as one page. Recorded above; the content follows James's per-quiz rule.
8. LIF5-068 carries no hard item. Depth is capped by the benchmark's scope; never pad (James, 28 Sep). The capstone before it carries five of the eight hard items.
9. The topic title in the summary frame carries "the". The architecture's title is "Kidneys, bladder and the reproductive organs"; spoken as "Here's everything we found out about the kidneys, the bladder and the reproductive organs" so the sentence reads naturally; the words are the row's.
10. No video is held back. L04 is marked "could do without a video" (a four-sentence fact the article carries in 205 words), but its script is written so the learner's choice stands; the batch carries all six videos.

Owed

• The non-author passes: review-questions over every item (34 quiz, 7 attached, 17 practice, 5 recall, 50 bank), review-figures over the 26 renders on the built pages, review-accuracy against the register and a grade-5 reference, then the blind read of blind/2026-10-08 (two cold readers; keys sequestered in KEYS_SEQUESTERED_G5T34.json) and adjudication.
• Pictures: the five cartoon placeholders through David's pack after the text is clean and reviewed (the topic carries no question for James, so the picture pass may run as soon as the reviews close).
• Videos: handoff/G5T34/videos/batch_G5T34.json + READY.md built and checked; not sent — every Grade 5 batch waits for James's word on the sample six before the rest of Living things goes.
• Not this topic's: the Living things strand test and the end-of-grade test that follow Topic 34.

v2 — the non-author review applied (8 October 2026)

Skill: review-lesson (Roles B and C) → review-questions, review-figures, review-accuracy @ cca3af6 — the full table is REVIEW_G5T34_2026-10-08.md; the page for James is REVIEW_NEXT_G5T34.md.

What changed: the L01 script now speaks the pale-urine case as well as the dark (the video stands alone; 147 words); the three long articles cut to 328 / 306 / 288 with no teaching lost (L02's sequences indices updated; L03's four First/Next/Then/Last lines removed, the card and numbered drawing keep the stops); L01-q2's "blood and bones" replaced by "the useful parts of food"; L01-q3's throat feedback corrected; "by its own way" → "not in the blood" (L01-q7, PP-26); L04's "far too small to see" → "almost too small to see" (article and script); the typed "kidneys" item now closes L01's quiz (q9 ↔ q10); PP-16's stem asks where the waste goes next; PP-27 states that she drank little; PP-49 states the comparison day; PP-36's why says "his"; rule_l01 and rule_l02 cards say the rule word for word; US spelling in the figures' alt, blind and placeholder text. Keys unchanged throughout. Counts now: scripts 147 / 150 / 150 / 147; articles 328 / 306 / 288 / 205. Gates re-run to the stated results (review record §8). Blind bundle re-cut at blind/2026-10-08-reviewed/ with CHANGED_IDS.md (L01-02, L01-09, L01-10, PP-16, PP-27, PP-49). Batch rebuilt and checked; not sent.

Skill: review-lesson (Roles B and C; Role A is the two cold readers' job after this) → review-questions, review-figures, review-accuracy @ cca3af6

Grade 5 Topic 34 — Kidneys, bladder and the reproductive organs — the non-author review and fix pass (8 October 2026)

§1 What a reader should know first

The topic is sound. The science is right at Florida 5.L.14.1's level, nothing a doctor would strike; the four lessons each teach one fact in the order the register gives; "pee" is said beside "urine" and then the term carries; L04 is plain and matter-of-fact — name, job, place, a man's and a woman's different, and nothing more. No claim item and no stated belief, which is right: no documented belief touches these atoms.

Two things needed fixing before a child meets it. The L01 video left out the pale-urine case (the article taught dark AND pale; the script spoke only dark, while two quiz items key on pale) — the video must stand alone, so the script now carries both cases in 147 words. And three bank items asked a question their options or data could not answer: PP-16 asked "which organ" over a next-stop set holding "out of the body"; PP-27 asked the reason for dark urine without saying the girl drank little; PP-49 said "less" and "more" with no comparison. Beyond those, the fixes are small: a false feedback line about the throat, a silly distractor replaced by the real error, a vague phrase, two rule cards made to say the rule word for word, the typed "kidneys" item moved to close its quiz, US spelling in the figures' accessible text, and the three long articles cut to 328 / 306 / 288 with no teaching lost.

Counts: 1 Must-fix · 11 Worth fixing · 6 Simplification-leave · 9 Not an error (the author's calls, each judged). All Must-fix and Worth-fixing findings are applied. Every gate re-run to its stated result (§6). The blind bundle is re-cut at blind/2026-10-08-reviewed/ with CHANGED_IDS.md (six ids). Nothing for James.

§2 The author's calls, judged

§3 Role B — the guidance review (one row per finding; a check with no finding says "clear")

§4 review-questions — the items (every quiz, attached, practice, recall and bank item read with its key)

check_key_tells.py → KEY TELLS: 0 of 101 MCQs flagged before and after. Key balance: bank MCQs A 10 · B 13 · C 12 · D 9 (max 30 %); attached string B B A B A B C (57 %); quiz three-option strings unchanged (L01 1 2 1 2 2 0, L02 0 2 1 2 0, L03 0 1 2 0 1 2, L04 0 2 1); no four keys alternate. Design-check-sequence types found and matched: L01 (a) fluency — yes; L02 (a) — yes; L03 (b) scaffolded → bare — yes; L04 (a), six items — yes. Order items: all three stored first to last, the stems' way. Typed items (8): closed, spellable, accept lists with article, plural and child forms; three correct answers in other words pass each (kidneys / the kidneys / kidney; urine / the urine / pee; bladder / the bladder / a bladder). Intro poll kept as a poll.

Design-move inventory for the three rewritten bank stems: PP-16 "student names the next stop out of the blood" (unchanged move, now the stem matches the set); PP-27 "student picks the reason for dark urine from a stated little-to-drink" (the same move as PP-07's colour item read backwards — the type sheet already marks PP-07 ⟂ PP-27); PP-49 "student chains little extra water → less, darker urine against a stated comparison day" (unchanged). No new scene, substance or name; nothing collides with the inventory.

§5 review-figures — every render opened (26 figures at 1.5×) and every built route read

Routes screenshotted at 800 px, light and dark: intro, L01–L04 article, L01 and L04 script, L01–L04 quiz, practice, PP100, summary. The page forces one colour scheme (the dark shot is identical to the light), so one scheme is the stage. check_svg_ids.py PASS (26 figures, 0 ids). No broken-image glyph; the five cartoon slots render the drawn placeholder with their brief.

§6 review-accuracy — the science against the register and a grade-5 reference

Reference frame: the LIF5 register (atoms 065–068, SD-6), Florida SC.5.L.14.1 (identify the organs in the human body and describe their functions, including the kidneys, bladder and reproductive organs), and a first-year physiology text for the facts behind each sentence.

Key changes: none. Deliberately omitted (so the next reader does not re-report them): nephrons and filtration pressure; reabsorption; the ureters', urethra's and sphincters' names; "urinary system"; urea and salts as the waste; the reproductive organs' names, their cells' names and any mechanism; puberty. Each is grades 6–8 or beyond the benchmark, and the module's docstring and the bank's bar list say so.

§7 Items changed (old → new), for the second read

blind/2026-10-08-reviewed/CHANGED_IDS.md lists the six bundle ids, no key text. Bundler count line: bundled: 95 mcq, 8 text (0 numeric), 1 frq, 3 order, 1 multi — held: 108 — every kind the modules hold is bundled; the bundle's [Drawing: …] lines carry no organ word (grep kidney / bladder / urine / reproductive / clean / store / waste → 0).

§8 Gates after the fixes

Files touched: content/G5T34_lessons.py, content/G5T34_pp100_bank.py, content/figures.py, blind/2026-10-08-reviewed/, handoff/G5T34/videos/batch_G5T34.json (+ READY.md as the builder writes it), and the two records. Nothing outside grade5/topic34_build and handoff/G5T34 was edited by this pass (handoff/VIDEO_IDS.json and VIDEOS_FOR_DAVID.csv show earlier, unrelated changes from other sessions — a G3T04 row and three durations — not from this run). No commit.

§9 For James

Nothing. No finding here would change what a student learns if decided the other way; the one Must-fix (the video's missing pale case) is a rule he has already given. The two cold readers (Role A) are next, then adjudication of their flags.

Adjudication (8 Oct 2026)

The blind read. Two cold readers on blind/2026-10-08-reviewed/: both agreed with every key — 0 MCQ disagreements across 108 items; PP-48's set (A, B) right from both; the three order items (L03-06, PP-46, PP-47) MATCH first-to-last for both readers; all 8 typed answers on their accept lists. No key moved in this pass; text only.

Gates after adjudication: topic checker 0 FAIL, 28 WARN (unchanged set), S46 B=0 C=0 D=0; terms hits {}; articles 0 FAIL (328 / 306 / 288 / 205; scripts 147 / 150 / 150 / 147); key tells 0 of 101; svg ids PASS; check_lessons.py S118 0 FAIL, S116 silent, the S26 tool-scope FAIL standing as recorded; page builds (4 lessons, 17 practice, 50 pp100, 26 figures). Bundle re-cut at blind/2026-10-08-adjudicated/ (95 mcq, 8 text, 1 frq, 3 order, 1 multi — held: 108) with CHANGED_IDS.md: L01-08, L01-09, L01-10, L02-08, L02-09, PP-11, PP-23 (ids only). Batch rebuilt (6 videos, B B A B A B C), check_brief.py all ✓ with the summary's standing protected-words note; strand 0. Not sent. Not committed. Files touched: content/G5T34_lessons.py, content/G5T34_pp100_bank.py, records/TYPES_G5T34.md, this record, blind/2026-10-08-adjudicated/, handoff/G5T34/videos/.